I have now fixed the flaws in "Closing Time" that Cherri found for me at Denny's last night. This story is now finished and is being moved to the "waiting to submit" folder.
I want to thank Claire (Charlie) Paul and Cherri Galbiati for all the help they have provided as proof readers for me, and finding the problems with stories that got past me. Thanks ladies. You guys make me a better writer.